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Thread: Old Jock. A story by Purplefan.

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    Wasnt sure about how it would come across as my punctuation is one of the problems i have with writing. Thats why the tutor asked if she could ghost write Rose.
    I am glad you liked it.

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    Not "nagging" really... Suzi's Avatar
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    Punctuation can be learnt - writing capturing readers interests can't be....
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    Punctuation's your editor's problem
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    I also have to point out that there is nothing wrong with punctuation, many good translators and writers have actually problems with it.

    Good story meanwhile.

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    Great story and paints many pictures in my head. I particularly like how you describe the characters and the surrounding scenes it makes the story come alive.

    If you you were to publish it it would need a proof reader to correct spelling mistakes and typos and sort out the punctuation and set it out in paragraphs to make it easier to read.

    Purple you've got the main thing going for you, that is you can tell a good story, respect.
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    That was fantastic.

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    Not "nagging" really... Suzi's Avatar
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    I don't suppose I can be cheeky and ask if I can use this as part of the DWD 10th Anniversary Celebrations could I?
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    of course you can.

    A popsicle stick makes a great bookmark. But eat the popsicle first. Don't make the same mistake I did.

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    Thank you so much. I'm honoured.
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