Only just spotted the next chapter CGirl, it reads fine to me, there is a hint of Gollem in some of the dialogue but that is no bad thing and fits in nicely.
I'm intrigued what the sparkly blue liquid is they drink :)
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Only just spotted the next chapter CGirl, it reads fine to me, there is a hint of Gollem in some of the dialogue but that is no bad thing and fits in nicely.
I'm intrigued what the sparkly blue liquid is they drink :)
Nice work!
Thanks for the feedback guys, I haven't had chance to write any more yet but you'll be the first to know when I do